The Spoiled Young Wife of the 80s, Making the Rough and Tough Man Nervous

I am new to writing novels so please wrtite reviews to point out my mistakes or things iIneed to improve on

Everything is good but the MCs. Basically their interaction is meant to be funny but it isn't at all. It's was funny at the start but until when are we supposed to find their bratty dispute funny, One is god knows how old he is and the other is more than 30 years old, and they can't get over their first misunderstanding, They keep arguing and fighting with each other like some snotty toddlers.

"Genjutsu: Sharingan" Itachi whispered as his eyes peered straight into Caribou's and after around twenty seconds his eyes rolled into his head and he passed out, Itachi stood up and sighed before turning and looking towards Luffy.

"what? " lily burst into a laughter leaving cherry confused, on noticing cherry wasnt smiling nor laughing her smile faded "you're not Kidding" fear had begun to creep into her heart "why would I kid about something like this?" cherry asked perplexed "that mansion next door is worth 900 billion dollars, he built it cause his grand father wanted him to supervise the headquarters here in California, he just moved in three days ago" cherry took a breath "you need to see him in his workout clothes, so breathtaking....i was gonna cu...." lily began to panic cutting cherry off "oh my God" she started pacing up and down the room "the MD's gonna be the guy next door, what if he notices me, or..... thinks I'm a stalker?" "don't worry," cherry assured her "Rudy's not that kinda person,  he hardly notices anybody, he's been friends with Josh for years now and he still calls me chase sometimes" . Josh was her boyfriend an international designer; bags, accessories, clothes,  etc,  they had been dating for 2 years so lily hadnt met him yet, "you're gonna love this job I promise" cherry pecked her on the fore head helping lily put on a smile then they talked on about the distance to the office and Finns new school, apparently it was on the way to the office so she could drop him everyday.

With wush and broom sound the cars started to race against each other from the south of Azor Empire to the portal opposite of country Bazid.

(Wishes being granted body being remade to fit the host criteria..... Good luck in your next life.)

He didnt even know he had one as he was looking thru he pulled out the fruit and ate it suddenly a new status apperead.

The bravest one is one of the Moonlight Lilly dragons he snatched a pear and eats it. One of the Deep Sands takes a fish. The White Orchid dragon carefully takes a fish. Soon all of the dragons are peacefully eating food. We soar high above the clouds. I cough a little .